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Blackberry
12-01-2004, 11:33 AM
Okay, so I'm running a Burning Wheel campaign in a world of my own design. Work has been really difficult and I haven't been on top of my game recently (not that I’ve ever been any good at designing plots). The next session is on Saturday. We've only played one session so far. I need some plot help!

The location:
- Sevrea, an area of land about 5,000 miles across, the focus of the campaign.
- Djeroon, biggest human city in the known world, about 50,000 population.
Djeroon is a huge city of extreme wealth and extreme poverty, due to the rather strict separation between nobility/wealthy folk and poor commoners.
For reference: http://www.anthrobunny.com/games/sevrea/sevrea.html
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The PCs:
- Kaden, a 17-year-old local street tough trying to work his way into the underworld brotherhood, skilled especially at burglary and generally living off of someone else*s earnings.
Beliefs: It is wrong to steal from those with less; Bow to and serve no one
Instincts: Always sit where you can see the door; Snag unattended items
Traits: Street-Smart; Alert; Dexterity of the Cat; Nimble

- Kagadon, a washed-up soldier for life, conscripted at 13 and now past his prime, doing guard work here and there while searching for a new purpose or an end, whichever comes first.
Beliefs: Fighting is the last resort, but once you start, finish it; Life is always cheap; Pleasure is false but still worthwhile
Instincts: Always keep an eye on the quiet guy; Always eat all you can whenever you can; Fighting is boring -- talk first
Traits: World-Weary; Hairy; Resigned to Death; Iron Stomach; Driven

- Piotr, a spy and professional information-gatherer from the northern land of Eighentin, exiled and searching for his missing wife.
Beliefs: Never trust Djerooni; My wife is still alive
Instincts: Always sit with back to wall; Always keep aware of your exits; Always carry a weapon when on the job
Traits: Aura of Innocence; Familiar Face; Scavenger; Street-Smart

The background:
- Two hundred years ago, Djeroon was the nexus of an empire that encompassed all of the human lands. It fell under circumstances that aren't important here, but left behind remnants of its magic and technology. Other than the seven major cities, most people are animistic farm villagers with bronze age technology.
- Fifteen years ago, Venzaal, the ambitious son of an ambitious Djerooni noble family of grand influence, reclaimed power over the weak Djerooni council of merchants and began an autocratic seizure of all of the lands of the former empire.
- Only the northern lands fended him off, because his military was too strung out (not much of a strategist) and because Eighentin had discovered/rediscovered how to make steel -- especially into armor and crossbow bolts. Venzaal was taken down and pilloried by his peers because he failed. It is rumored that he left an heir, who is now fifteen himself, and who is being hidden by certain noble families who would like to see a return to the iron-fisted stability of empire.
- Five years ago, an insectoid race called The Hive swooped down from the mountains and took advantage of Djeroon's disorganized rebuilding state to raid and pillage, actually reaching the walls of the city itself. The city and countryside are still recovering from it.

The plot:
1) Piotr's wife is a master spy for Eighentin. Her mission was to infiltrate Djerooni noble society and make contacts in the faction that was opposing Venzaal's heir, to see if they could be a threat, could be ignored, should be taken out -- Eighentin would love another brash incompetent on Djeroon's throne. She left on her mission six years ago -- not even telling her husband about it, just leaving in the night. She reported to her contact once a month who reported back to Eighentin. She stopped reporting six months ago; her contact also stopped reporting back five months ago.
Eighentin's leaders also found out that, during the war, Bob had been spying for someone who later turned out to be a double-agent in Djeroon's employ. They exiled him, but privately gave him another mission -- as the only person who might recognize Eleva (his wife) in disguise and possibly the only one who could turn her back if she turnedcoat, he was to go to Djeroon and see if he could discover her fate.

2) Kaden's friend, Zarn, told Kaden of a manor in the noble tiers (actual tiers on the Royal Hill where the nobility live) which Zarn had been casing, where a noble woman lived, some sort of ambassador from a western or northern land. She lived alone, he knew that much, and in substantial wealth. The odd thing was that, six months ago, she vanished. Deliveries of food were made weekly as if someone still lived there, but when he finally evaded the city guards and broke in, he found fresh food, no servants, and no lady -- not even kitsch from any western or northern lands to be found.
After Zarn made a few profits off the place, some guards were hired to watch the manor while odd deliveries were made in the night -- magicians, alchemical vessels, and odd techno-magical machines from the Old Empire.
A month ago, the lady suddenly returned, along with a local Lord who lived there with her as if nothing had ever been different.

3) Kagadon is drinking away the coppers from his last big job -- a two-week long stint as a guard for a noble manor up in the tiers. He and a friend of his from the same old mercenary unit are paid well, and he doesn't inquire about the odd deliveries and even odder visitors during the time he's manning his post.

Our story so far:
4) Kaden tracks down one of the mercenaries who was hired to guard the manor (Kagadon); they discuss the strangeness and investigate the manor, both casing the place at night and talking briefly with Lord Haffel who now lives there with his lady.
5) After casing various taverns for several weeks, Piotr happens to overhear one street-rat bragging to another about a strange manor and a vanished lady from north-or-west. After following the burglar and mercenary, he cases the house himself and breaks in -- while the lord is sleeping. He discovers a secret passage in the wine cellar (but doesn't open it yet), hears two people sleeping upstairs and at least one maid downstairs, and opens one room to find an alchemists' research lab, casks of strange substances, and an oversized bizarre chair, seemingly made up of spikes and clasps that would bind and poke whomever sat in it.
6) Lord Haffel and his lady are scheduled to be married in one week. Piotr, with some Acting skill and some scribe training, hires himself on with the scribe who is working up the paperwork for the wedding.

I have some of my own ideas, but I'm curious -- where would you go from here?

Blackberry
12-02-2004, 04:05 PM
Mainly I'm looking for (a) what really happened to Eleva and (b) how to involve Kagadon and Kaden more in the plot.

Bill Cook
12-02-2004, 08:04 PM
Why was Piotr exiled?

Is Djeroon a city or a state? Eighentin?

Why was Venzaal usurped? (Sure, he failed to take Eighentin, but he took all the other lands.) How was it accomplished? By peers, do you mean sympathizers or merchant loyalists? So, they pubicly humiliated him, but was he slain? Imprisoned?

Venzaal is out; who's in?

Ok, about the heir: surely these are sympathizers, safeguarding the boy.

How has the Hive impacted Eighentin? Honestly, this wrinkle really detracts. I would cut it.

It sounds like you've assumed that heir opposers are a threat, which doesn't make sense. Are you referring to a faction of nobles who wish a return to empire but not with Venzaal's heir? Or do you mean, simply, the merchant council?

Eighentin would love another brash incompetent on Djeroon's throne.

Even more than commerce? Or does Eighentin seek to retaliate against Djeroon by conquering it?

Who the hell is Bob? Who is the double-agent he worked for? The Eighentin Government's motivation in hiring a known traitor is nonsensical. Losing all contact would not at all suggest a risk that she'd turned double agent. I would think their first interest would be to silence Piotr's wife or recover her, if possible. Furthermore, why, why, why did she stop making contact?

Is the returning lady ambassador Piotr's wife? Whose estate is this? Didn't the lady precede the lord in residence? Who are the odd deliveries for? (Clearly, their purpose is to create superior arms for a second offensive.)

Why would a street rat brag about a vanished lady? It doesn't make any sense. He might brag that he raped her, stole her valuables or ransomed or murdered her, but not that she vanished.

Mainly I'm looking for (a) what really happened to Eleva and (b) how to involve Kagadon and Kaden more in the plot.

Well, what did?

As for weaving Kaden and Kagadon, conceptually, they are tools to explore different aims: (a) the feeling of empowerment from theft and (b) the final release of death or a last chance at redemption.

Some ideas:

Have Piotr hire Kaden to steal the rare catalyst to the Djeroon war machine.
Have Bob reveal Haffel's lady as Eleva; Kagadon has taken work as a jailor and overhears her, weeping her plight to the moon.

Blackberry
12-03-2004, 03:56 PM
Why was Piotr exiled?

It's partly a cover story. Piotr was originally trained in the art of spy work by someone who later turned out to be a double agent for Djeroon. Part of what he had Piotr do as a youngster was smuggle out plans for city defenses during the war with Djeroon 15 years ago (Venzaal's war of conquest). Eighentin's ruling council found this out recently and gave Piotr an ultimatum: as the only person who could recognize Eleva in deep disguise and possibly the only person who could convince her to come back if she turned coat, he could go try to find her with the cover story that he was exiled -- or he and his family could be hanged for treason.

Is Djeroon a city or a state? Eighentin?

They are both large city-states or small kingdoms. They call themselves city-states, though.

Why was Venzaal usurped? (Sure, he failed to take Eighentin, but he took all the other lands.) How was it accomplished? By peers, do you mean sympathizers or merchant loyalists? So, they pubicly humiliated him, but was he slain? Imprisoned?

He was usurped by the high-level merchants and some of the oldest noble families. Venzaal sold out everything Djeroon had to build a massive conscript army. When they ran up against Eighentin's steel-clad army, that was basically it for Djeroon. Its entire economy had become based on conquest.

He was pilloried briefly and then taken away -- presumably beheaded. A rather decomposed head was publicly displayed.

Venzaal is out; who's in?

The noble families placed a regent in charge.

Ok, about the heir: surely these are sympathizers, safeguarding the boy.

How has the Hive impacted Eighentin? Honestly, this wrinkle really detracts. I would cut it.

Wrinkle? It came about because one of the characters (who is not playing) was a scientist studying Hive physiology and had an event in his background 5 years ago that needed a small war against Djeroon and also needed to account for his mother being abducted by the Hive. I suppose I could drop it now, but it lends a real air of total disaster to modern Djeroon -- the kind of thing that we saw in pre-WWII Germany.

It sounds like you've assumed that heir opposers are a threat, which doesn't make sense. Are you referring to a faction of nobles who wish a return to empire but not with Venzaal's heir? Or do you mean, simply, the merchant council?

Eighentin has assumed that something needs to happen in Djeroon. They want to be behind whatever it is. They sent Eleva into deep cover to try to find out if there really is an heir, if he's better or worse than his father, if the pro- faction or the anti- faction are stronger, who can be duped or controlled, and so on. I haven't actually assumed anything about them yet -- I was letting it flow organically. The anti- faction could be totally disorganized.

Eighentin would love another brash incompetent on Djeroon's throne.

Even more than commerce? Or does Eighentin seek to retaliate against Djeroon by conquering it?

Mostly they see an opportunity. Eighentin's people were mainly crafters and artisans before Venzaal's War. They discovered that this steel stuff was really useful and so they just now have geared up production. Djeroon has been behind wars of conquest twice now in recent history, and everyone else (except maybe Ansad) are sick of it.

Who the hell is Bob?

Old name for Piotr.

The Eighentin Government's motivation in hiring a known traitor is nonsensical.

I never was any good at plotting. Piotr is not an intentional traitor. Piotr hates himself for having been duped by a Djerooni. Piotr is a really good spy otherwise.

Losing all contact would not at all suggest a risk that she'd turned double agent. I would think their first interest would be to silence Piotr's wife or recover her, if possible. Furthermore, why, why, why did she stop making contact?

That's something that Piotr should find out. Are you asking me as a GM? That's what I'm asking for ideas on. I have some of my own but I wanted to see what other people could come up with before I posted them.

Is the returning lady ambassador Piotr's wife?

That's what I had intended, but it's still open -- Piotr hasn't seen her yet.

Whose estate is this?

Lady Treska Diamat, ambassador from Gazon. (Eleva's cover identity)

Didn't the lady precede the lord in residence?

Yes. That's why it's odd that Lord Haffel suddenly lives there.

Who are the odd deliveries for? (Clearly, their purpose is to create superior arms for a second offensive.)

Hmm, that's an interesting idea. I had intended them to be to either (a) maintain the lady, who is a magically-alchemically created simulacrum of Eleva, installed as a decoy for other Eighentin spies, or (b) a way of keeping Eleva brainwashed.

Why would a street rat brag about a vanished lady? It doesn't make any sense. He might brag that he raped her, stole her valuables or ransomed or murdered her, but not that she vanished.

My original intent was that he was hired by Lord Haffel and his cronies, to act as a plant attract any more Eighentin spies who might have been working with Eleva.

Mainly I'm looking for (a) what really happened to Eleva and (b) how to involve Kagadon and Kaden more in the plot.

Well, what did?

I'm looking for ideas on that.


Some ideas:

Have Piotr hire Kaden to steal the rare catalyst to the Djeroon war machine.
Have Bob reveal Haffel's lady as Eleva; Kagadon has taken work as a jailor and overhears her, weeping her plight to the moon.


Would Haffel's gang hire Kagadon as a guard again? I suppose so if he did a fair job the first time.

Bill Cook
12-04-2004, 02:14 PM
.. he had Piotr .. smuggle out plans for city defenses .. he could go try to find her .. or he and his family could be hanged for treason.

Bing! Crystal.

Are you asking me as a GM?

Yes.

I had intended them to be to either (a) maintain the lady, who is a magically-alchemically created simulacrum of Eleva, installed as a decoy for other Eighentin spies, or (b) a way of keeping Eleva brainwashed.

That's cool. I guess I shouldn't be so hasty to make assumptions. :oops:

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You've got a flair for plot twists. Challenging player expectations can be good for adding spice to play.

Also, you seem to come at things from the outside-in, i.e. stamp the result and then divine the cause, without even you knowing. I tend to work in reverse; I figure out various characters'/factions' motivations and then decide during play what that will lead them to do.

But it sounds like you've got some ideas of your own, already; i.e. the simulacrum or mind enslavement twists.

Sounds fun!

Blackberry
12-05-2004, 12:15 PM
Really? Okay, I guess I'll stick with what I have. Thanks for the discussion.